BR2-12: Slow Down, Mrs Brown!

I read the book today. Main character is Mrs. Brown. She liked to walk to a shop. Then, she liked to talk a dog and children and look at a garden on the way. But she walked hard so she bought a motorised scooter. It could run very fast. She liked to take the scooter and run very fast. But she ran on a sidewalk where children and a dog were.

One day, she was scolded by the neighbors. She thought about herself and decided to run the scooter slowly. But she felt shoot on fun so she ran it very fast in midnight! I want to be a grandmother like her.

(112 words)

★Dinner★

I had classes and went to Hikaru’s house yesterday. She lives near the KGU. I ate my lunch box and miso soup that she made. She is kind! Then, she said “I want to use a computer in the KGU” so we went to the library. I was reading a magazine while she used it. After the third period, we met Hitomi in front of the library. Then, we happened to meet our senior of circle. We said to them “thank you for your letter,” because we got letters from them. They said "you are welcome, we grad, too." We saw them after a long separation so we talked with them for a while. After that, Shihori of circle’s president came there. The day, 5 circle gathered and the dinner party was held in Hyakusyo. Hitomi and Hikaru went to the town by bicycle, Shihori and I went there by bus. We went to PRONT because we had time. I ordered a cup of coffee and a cheese pie. I love the coffee in the café. We talked about our circle and love. We don't have boy friends so we often talked about dream boyfriends. Then, we went to an amusement arcade under the TSUTAYA and took a print club. There were many people in there.

After that, we went in front of Daiei at 6:30 and moved to Hyakusyo. We drawed for seats and I sat down next another circle's girl. She and I went to same high school and she belonged to volleyball club so I knew her. I said "Good evening! I knew you, how are you?" She said "hello, I'm fine thank you. I knew you, too." We knew each other! I could talk with another circle’s member so I had a good time. I belonged to basketball club when I was a junior high school student. My junior of same club took part in the dinner. I met her after a long separation so we talked about old memories. After the dinner, I went back home by bus. It was very cold today, but I had a good time.

(356 words)

Portfolio for Writing IV (2009-10)

Student ID: 08171

Portfolio for Writing IV, Section 1C

(See: Note 1, below)

0.0. OVERVIEW

Reviews, Posts, Words, and More

(See: Note 2, below.)

1.0. ESSAYS

(See: Note 3, below.)


Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).

1.1. Showcase	Short titles with links to blog posts	Dates yyyy.mm.dd	¶	W	C	L	P	M
2-01a (2009.10.07)	My favorite places	2009.10.13	4	349	6	0	0	0
2-01b (2009.10.21)	My favorite places	2009.10.21	8	472	0	0	0	0
(2-01c)
2-02a (2009.11.04)	Gucci and Tiffany&Co. websites	2009.10.29	4	388	4	2	1	0
2-02b (2009.11.18)	Gucci and Tiffany&Co. websites	2009.11.17	8	439	0	2	1	0
(2-02c)
2-03a (2009.12.02)	My language stories	2009.12.02	5	555	6	0	0	0
2-03b (2009.12.18/22)
(2-03c)
Totals	---	---	29	2203	16	4	2	0

Key:

¶: number of paragraphs five (5) or more sentences in length

W: number of words

C: number of comments

L: number of links

P: number of photos or other graphics

M: number of other media included in post

1.2. Most Improved Essay

(See: Note 4, below.)


Selection and Assessment: Which of the three essays that you've written and revised this semester shows the most improvement? What did you do to improve it? Remember that complete answers are better than short answers, focus on your writing (accuracy, appropriacy, content and organization, rather than graphics or other media), and explain at least two major improvements.

Essay 2-02b: Gucci and Tiffany&Co. websites

I increased paragraphs.
I introduced another site.
I compared with two websites.

2.0. COMMENTS

Showcase	Short titles of posts with links	Dates of comments yyyy.mm.dd	Numbers of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog*	Social Media and Social Networking Explained	2009.10.14	23	My comment is very short so I couldn't state my idea.
2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog*	Esay 02-03a My English track	2009.12.09	22	I asked her a question.
2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog*	Essay 2-03a: My language stories	2009.12.09	16	She understood my essay and said her opinion.
2.4. Most comments on:	Short titles of posts with link	Dates of posts yyyy.mm.dd	Total number of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.4.1. Any one of your essays*	Essay 2-01a: My favorite places	2009.10.13	86	They said their opinion and asked me.
2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	2009.10.15	---	---
2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	33	I answered their questions.
2.4.2. Any of your other posts*	Lunch with Hitomi:)	2009.12.05	21	They asked me a question and said opinion about the photograph.
2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	2010.01.10	---	---
2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	13	I showed appreciation of their comments and answered their questions.

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* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes comments good.

2.5. Recent comments display

Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a sidebar, header, or footer widget? Where, or why not? Please explain.

• I display recent comments on top of a sidebar.

2.6. Additional reflections on comments

• I usually ask questions and write my opinion.
• I answered questions and thank to everyone.

3.0. BOOK REVIEWS

3.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates: yyyy.mm.dd	Words	Comments
Example:	Vampire Killer	2007.05.16	39	1
BR 2-01	BR 2-01: LITTLE BEAR'S VISIT	2009.10.07	159	0
BR 2-02	BR 2-02: Beef Stew	2009.10.08	100	0
BR 2-03	BR 2-03: CORDUROY'S Garden	2009.10.15	140	0
BR 2-04	BR 2-04: The Goose that laid the Golden Eggs	2009.10.29	153	0
BR 2-05	BR2-05: Stuart Sets Sail	2009.11.03	105	0
BR 2-06	BR2-06: The Billy Goats Gruff	2009.11.19	306	0
BR 2-07	BR2-07: ON THE TEAM	2009.11.26	90	0
BR 2-08	BR2-08: THE SORCERER'S APPRENTICE	2009.11.30	223	0
BR 2-09	BR2-09: Glacier	2009.12.03	103	0
BR 2-10	BR2-10: DAD'S TRICK	2009.12.27	163	0
BR 2-11	BR 2-11: THE JEWELLERY SHOP ROBBERY	2010.01.05	141	0
BR 2-12	BR2-12: Slow Down, Mrs Brown!	2010.01.09	112	0
BR 2-13	BR 2-13: Bruno's Tea	2010.01.10	206	0
BR 2-14	BR2-14: MAKING HEADLINES	2010.01.13	180	0
BR 2-15	BR 2-15: Wait and See	2010.01.14	210	0
BR 2-16	BR 2-16: Ben Fox Saves the Day	2010.01.14	131	0
BR 2-17	BR 2-17: ARTHUR'S READING RACE	2010.01.14	109	0
BR 2-18	BR 2-18: A SNAKE MISTAKE	2010.01.15	121	0
---	---	Totals:	2752	0

Note: Please calculate and list book review Totals for words and comments without including those from the example (above).

3.2. Best Book Review

Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• BR2-08: THE SORCERER'S APPRENTICE is my best book review because I like story of sorcerer and the illustration is very cute.
  

  
  
  

4.0. BLOG LAYOUT, LABELING, LINKING, and MEDIA

Showcase	Yes	No
4.1. Does your blog display an archive?	✓
4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts?	✓
4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month?	✓
4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar?	✓
4.2. Does your blog display a cloud or list of labels in the sidebar?	✓
4.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately):	---	---
"books" (plural) AND "reviews" (plural)	✓
"essays" (plural) AND "portfolios" (plural, without "proto-")	✓
"quickposts" (plural, with no space between quick and posts)	✓
"links" (plural) AND "media" (plural)		✓
"movies" (plural) AND "websites" (plural)	✓
"brainstorms" (or "brainstorming"), "essay prep.," AND "free-writing" (or "free-writes")	✓
4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels?	✓
How many other labels have you attached to three (3) or more posts? 13 other labels attached to three or more posts	---	---
Which labels, and to how many posts each? Please list those labels instead of www, xxx, yyy..., and list numbers of posts instead of n, m, o... (in parentheses), below. books (30) drafts (3) essay prep (5) Essays (11) favorites (4) Homeworks (13) links (3) portfolios (3) reviews (34) revisions (5) Speaking (6) university (4) websites (3)	---	---
4.3. Links and media	---	---
4.3.1. Do your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics?	✓
Does your blog profile include a photo or graphic representation?	✓
How many of your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics? 56 posts including photos or other graphics	---	---
4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links?	✓
How many of your posts this semester include three (3) or more links? 48 posts including three or more links (including this portfolio!)	---	---
4.3.3. Does your blog include other media?		✓
How many of your blog posts this semester include other media? ___ posts including other media	---	---
What kind(-s) of media have you included in posts this semester? Please list the kinds here: ... ... ...	---	---
What media content that you originally produced, if any, do your blog posts for this semester contain? Please list and explain each item briefly, and add short links and dates (yyyy.mm.dd) for reference. ... (short link, date) ... (short link, date) ... (short link, date)	---	---

4.4. Overall presentation

What have you done to enhance the overall presentation and readability of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.

1. I usually posted one graphic on blog post.
   
2. I like a simple design.
   
3. I display followers in a sidebar.
   

5.0. ADDITIONAL REFLECTIONS ON YOUR BLOG AND YOUR WRITING FOR IT

Please feel free to include reflections on both class work and homework, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, selections, and reflections).

• I felt that writing long essays is difficult for me.
• I learned many words and grammars.
  
• I mistook many words on essays.

6.0. ADVICE AND SUGGESTIONS FOR YOURSELF, YOUR PEERS, AND YOUR SUCCESSORS

• I should change my blog design.
  
• I should finish to write book reviews as fast.
  
• I should post medias.
  

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Notes:

1. This portfolio template derives from Writing Studio Blog templates for Writing IIIc and Writing IVc (2007-08), Writing III, §§1a & 1c, Writing IV: Portfolio, §§1a & 1c (2008-09), and the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III.
2. Please use the same code in section 0.0 that you used to embed your proto-portfolios (PPFs) in the footer of your blog, which you should already have revised to display your 2nd (fall) semester PPF first.
3. The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derived from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
   
4. The essay selection and explanation item (§1.2, above) differs from that in the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III. Please read the new item carefully before making a selection.

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BR 2-11: THE JEWELLERY SHOP ROBBERY

I read the book today. The main character is Eddie. He saw which people crowded in front of a jewellery shop when he went back home. He heard that thieves stole all jewellery in the shop. Then, it reported that the thieves got into a red car and escaped in news. He said to his mother that he found a red car at next vacant house.

After dinner, he went to outside and looked in the vacant house from the window, but there were no one. When he went back home, he heard voice from the house. He returned there soon and looked again. He saw which two man took out many jewellery of a black box. He went back home hastily and talked to his mother all. She called on police so thieves were caught. I think Eddie is hero!

(141 words)

Shopping with my mother

I got up early in the morning and went to Tsuruya with my mother by my car. First, I searched a wallet but I couldn’t find my favorite one so I didn’t buy. Instead of wallet, I got a shoulder bag from my mother. I said “Thank you very much!” to her. She said “You are welcome. Coming of Age Day will come soon. Congratulation!” I went to many shops and decided the bag at last. I will treasure it.

After that, we went to Italian restaurant Kinomi on Namiki Street. The restaurant was famous so there were many people. We had to queue in front of the restaurant. Today was very cold and I hate cold weather so I went through hardships. My mother ate Doria and I ate pasta. We can eat breads all we want. After the lunch, dessert and coffee served. We could eat chocolate cakes. It was delicious so I want to go there with my friends again. I like eating delicious foods very much! Then, we went to Tsuruya and bought packet lunches and piroshiki. My feet became swollen when I arrived at my house. I want to travel another prefecture with my mother.

(200 words)

Shopping with Hitomi★

I went to the town today. I met Hitomi in front of PARCO and went shopping. There were many people in there because a winter sale started. I bought a jacket and skirt. She didn't buy anything. I could buy them at half price so I was very glad. I found my favorite boot, but I couldn’t buy it because a long line formed in front of a cash register of the shop. There were many people in PARCO and New-s. We were hungry so we went to have lunch. I ate a stew of hamburger set and Hitomi ate a fried chicken set. The price was only 490 yen!! We paid 300 yen and ate cake and coffee. I ate a chocolate cake, Hitomi ate a custard pudding. We talked about love. We have eaten sufficiently.

After that, I said “Good bye, Hitomi” and went to center post office of the town because I work in there now. I sorted a lot of New Year’s card with Yayoi and Hikari. My foot is very tired because I work with standing. I worked until 6 o’clock and went back home by bus. Shopping helps reduce my stress. I arrived my house and changed my clothes. Then, I went to my grandparent’s house near my home. My aunt came there. We ate kimuchi nabe and sushi and osechi. I showed my clothes which bought today. My mother said "Oh, good clothes. It was cheap." I said "Thanks, I could buy at half price." I got New Year’s gift from my grandfather and aunt. I said “Thank you very much” to them. They said "you are welcome." They are very kind. My aunt got very drunk on beer so she was funny. I ate osechi so I might have grown fat….

(299 words)

+*A Happy New Year*+

A happy New Year (^^)/ I met old friends yesterday. I belonged to same club activities when we were junior high school students. I haven’t seen them for a long time. Aya came for us by car and went to a supermarket. We bought ingredients of kimuchi nabe; pork, beansprouts, napa cabbages, shiitake mushroom and so on. Then, we went to Aya’s house and cut vegetables. Her house is in Tsuboi near the town. When we ate kimuchi nabe, Natsuki came the house. After we finished eating it, we put rice and cheese in the pot and made rice porridege. It was delicious. We watched Kouhaku and talked about past memories.

Then, we saw the old year out. I thought I spent good year. We visited Fujisaki shrine near her house. I was surprised because there were many people in there. It was very cold. After that, we went to karaoke by Aya’s car and have sung for 2 hours. I was very sleepy so I slept on a sofa. My goal of this year is eating many delicious foods (^~^)!

(181 words)